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Writing News for the Sunshine State & the Solar System
North Florida Writers December 2005
In this issue:
|THE WRONG STUFF
Scott Oden, Men of Bronze (Medallion 2004):
. . . The soldier tried to bring his spear back into play, it's head skittering on the stones. (p. 216)
Without a word, Barca lead them out through the northern entrance. (219)
Chassis of wood and bronze split apart, tumbling end over end to crush friend and foe without prejudice. (219)
W.S. SAYS: In this otherwise interesting historical novel about ancient Egypt, Persians, Phoenicians, and Greeks, you find occasional incorrect usages of lie and lay. Above, you don't need the apostrophe in the possessive form; the past tense of lead is led, while chassis is like crisis, with the plural ending in -es.
QUOTE FROM A WRITER'S QUILL
When audiences come to see us authors, it is largely in the hope that we'll be funnier to look at than to read.
WRITERS BORN IN DECEMBER
1--Rex Stout (1886) and Woody Allen (1935); 2--Robert Bloomfield (1766), Nikos Kazantzákis (1885), Jon Silkin (1930), and T. Coraghessan Boyle (1948); 3--Joseph Conrad (1857) and Hermann Heijermans (1864); 4--Jean Chapelain (1595), Frances Power Cobbe (1822), Samuel Butler (1835), Rainer Maria Rilke (1875) and Cornell Woodrich (1903);
5--Christina Rossetti (1830), Walt Disney (1901), Joan A. Williams (1925), Joan Dideon (1934), Hanif Kureishi (1954); 6--Elizabeth Carter (1717), Thomas Ingoldsby (Richard Harris Barham) (1788), Joyce Kilmer (1886), and Peter Handke (1942); 7--Paul Adam (1862), Joyce Cary (1888), and Willa Cather (1873); 8--Bjřrnstjerne Bjřrnson (1832), James Thurber (1894), Delmore Schwartz (1913), and James Tate (1943); 9--John Milton (1608);
10--William Plomer (1903); 11--Naguib Mahfouz (1911), Grace Paley (1922), Jim Harrison (1937), Tom McGuane (1939); 12--Gustave Flaubert (1821) and Arthur Brisbane (1864); 13--Heinrich Heine (1797), Drew Pearson (1896), Kenneth Patchen (1911), and James Wright (1927); 14--Nostradamus (1503) and Shirley Jackson (1916);
15--Maxwell Anderson (1888) and Muriel Rukeyser (1913); 16--Jane Austen (1775), Noel Coward (1899), Theodore Weiss (1916), Arthur C. Clarke (1917), and Philip K. Dick (1928); 17--John Almon (1737), Rose Terry Cook (1827), Ford Madox Ford (1873) and Erskine Caldwell (1903); 18--Saki (1870) and Steven Spielberg (1947); 19--Manuel Bretón de los Herreros (1796), Emily Dickinson (1830), Italo Svevo (1861) and Jean Genet (1910);
20--Sandra Cisneros (1954); 21--Benjamin Disraeli (1804), James Lane Allen (1849), Albert Payson Terhune (1872), and Heinrich Böll (1917); 22--Charles Stuart Calverley (1831), Edwin Arlington Robinson (1869) and Kenneth Rexroth (1905); 23--Robert Bly (1926); 24--George Crabbe (1754) and Matthew Arnold (1822);
25--Lady Grizel Baillie (1665), Fernán Caballero (Cecilia Francisca Josefa de Arrom) (1796), Rod Serling (1924); 26--Dion Boucicault (1822?), René Bazin (1853), Henry Miller (1891), Jean Toomer (1894), and Steve Allen (1921); 27--François Hemsterhuis (1721) and Charles Olson (1910); 28--Manuel Puig (1932), Alasdair Gray (1934), and Theodore Dreiser (1945); 29--William Gaddis (1922) and Peter Meinke (1932);
30--Rudyard Kipling (1865), Paul Bowles (1910), and A. W. Purdy (1918); 31--G. A. Burger (1747), José Mariá de Heredia y Campuzano (1803), Frances Steloff (1887), and Patti Smith (1946).
CALENDAR OF EVENTS
Meetings of NFW are held on the second Saturday of the month at 2 p.m. on the Kent Campus of Florida Community College of Jacksonville. We generally meet in F128B (auditorium conference room).
You may receive feedback from specific individuals by mailing the manuscript and return postage to the above address.
Dec. 10: Lillian Brown, Banned in Boston
Past speakers have included novelists Jack Hunter, David
Poyer, Page Edwards, Ruth Coe Chambers, William Kerr, Tom Lashley; poets, William Slaughter, Mary Baron, Mary Sue Koeppel, Dorothy Fletcher, George Gilpatrick; columnists Vic Smith, Tom Ivines, and Robert Blade; editors Buford Brinlee and Nan Ramey; agent Debbie Fine; magazine editor Sara Summers; medical writers Elizabeth Tate and Michael Pranzatelli; oral historian Robert Gentry; plus many others.
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MEMBERSHIP IN THE NFW
If you are writing a story or poem, you will need some expert feedback - the sort that you will receive at a meeting of the North Florida Writers.
You won't profit from automatic praise that a close friend or relative might give or jealous criticism from others who may feel threatened by your writing.
The NFW specializes in CONSTRUCTIVE feedback that will enable your manuscript to stand on its own two feet and demand that it be accepted by an editor or agent. Hence, you need the NFW.
The North Florida Writers is a writer's best friend because we help members to rid manuscripts of defects and to identify when a work is exciting and captivating.
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Is your membership current? To find out, check the mailing label. If it says "0104" next to your last name, your membership
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HOW DOES CRITIQUING WORK?
When you attend a meeting of the North Florida Writers, you eventually discover that NO ONE has ever died while his or her manuscript was being read and critiqued. You may be ready to face the ordeal yourself. . .or, reading this, you may wonder what exactly takes place during a critiquing.
First, you pitch your manuscript into a stack with others' works-in-progress. Then one of the NFW members hands out each piece to volunteer readers, taking care NOT to give you back your own manuscript to read.
Second, as the reading begins, each author is instructed NOT to identify himself or herself and especially NOT to explain or defend the work. The writer may never have heard the piece read aloud by another's voice, so the writer needs to focus on the sound of his or her sentences.
Third, at the finish of each selection, the NFW members try to offer constructive advice about how to make the story better. If a section was confusing or boring, that information may be helpful to the author.
The NFW will listen to 10 pages (double-spaced) of prose (usually a short story or a chapter).
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